The Emerald Speckled Ring: Part 1

by James
(Sydney, NSW)

This is a story I wrote in 2009. I think it may be my best story yet. Please comment on this story. If you find any mistakes feel free to comment on them.

It is about a boy...

The Emerald Speckled Ring

Jumun was in his father's space shuttle on the way to the new space city. He was eleven years old and born in the year 2173. The new space city was one of five, all of then them being in different galaxies. He was in first class, for his father was the chief designer of the city. He pitied all the other passengers in the standard class.

Then the captain called out, "We are just passing an unidentified planet and I now know the reason why it never showed up on the star charts. It has a high energy source that jams the scanners. If you look out the window you will now see it." Jumun looked out. The planet was covered in a desert, a hostile world for sure."

Then he overheard the captain talking to the co-pilot. "That's strange! The planet is documented as a water planet- 95% water and 5% extreme heat, normal for a planet. But from what I can see the planet is at least 60% desert."

Jumun was puzzled. Then an explosion ripped through the back of the shuttle and all the passengers screamed.

Thinking quickly, Juman made for the escape pods. He opened the hatch and climbed in. The ship vaporized, setting fire to its engines. The pod streaked towards the so called desert planet. Jumun leaped towards the front of the pod to escape the heat of the fire, looking back at the ship, he saw it was gone. Then the pod was hit by the debris of the vaporised space shuttle. Rattling through the atmosphere the pod started to break apart. Luckily for Jumun, the pod suddenly smashed into the ground and threw him out on the sand. He looked up; the heat on the barren world was almost as bad as in the pod. He looked around. There was just endless sand. Jumun turned around and saw the pod. Some bits were still on fire or smouldering. There was no way to get off the planet by the pod. He heard a huge roar and footprints were pushed up in the sand like someone was walking under ground. The footprints came closer and closer, Jumun was getting nervous so he ran until he tripped over a smooth bit of metal lying five meters away. The footprints plonked away and Jumun had a brain wave.

Jumun picked up the piece of metal; it was not burnt or hot. It was also not sharp at the edges. Jumun had just realized that he was standing on a sand mountain; it had a steep slope down to the bottom. He may as well have some fun; he was going to die of thirst in a few days anyway. He sat on the metal piece and pushed off. His toboggan was racing down this mountain like a snake. "Yaaaaaaahoooooo!" he yelled. Meanwhile a drift of sand blew up in his face. "Ahhhhhhhh, my eyyyyyyessssss!" he yelled. Subsequently the piece of metal slipped out from under him, and launched him up into the air. Jumun flew, yelling, eyes closed down the mountain until he felt himself touch the ground, then everything went black.

Jumun woke to find himself lying in the sand. He picked himself up, to find that nearly every bone in his body was sore. Sitting right next to him was the piece of metal. He found that it was cooler on the lower slopes because the sun was not glaring down on him like a pair penetrating eyes. Looking ahead, to his amazement he saw a weather beaten palace. Jumun now knew where the next stop on this tour was: the palace.

Jumun trudged up the final steps to the palace. He had been walking all night and was exhausted and hungry. He had not eaten or drunk since he crash landed and on a desert planet he reckoned that wasn't too healthy. But there was a chance of there being food in this palace and that kept him going. The palace was magnificent, great pillars supported the overhanging porch and were lime green in some places. He wondered what civilization had lived on this planet. He shoved the doors open to find cool air flowing at him. Jumun ran in and closed the doors. The air was wonderful. But suddenly he backed a way from a wall. Laying there was an octopus like skeleton. His hair prickled and Jumun ran into the next room. Luckily there was some food that he recognized, grapes, apples and oranges. He was amazed and quickly ate until he was full. Then he found a cup full of water and drank it all. Satisfied, Jumun walked in to the next room. He was wowed. The ceiling was very high and the room stretched out before him.

Without warning the smooth stone floor exploded and a giant monster rose up out of the floor and glared at him. "How dare you eat and drink at my table?" it said. Jumun looked at the monster; it had scales like a fish and walked upright. It had two arms and his head didn?t touch the roof. He concluded in his mind that it must be one of the fabled monsters of the solar system Vulpix, a Gorax. As it trudged towards him, he noted in satisfaction that because of its enormous weight several of the roof stones were becoming looser with the Gorax's every movement. One of the stones fell, striking the giant in the temple. The Gorax roared, shaking the palace. The huge thing fell backwards and died with out a sound.

In the front room of the palace life stirred that had been not touched for centuries and it awoke. The slimy creature picked its self up and was joined be five others.

"There is a boy in the main hall, Leader." one of them reported to him.
"Good. Has he killed the Gorax?" the leader asked.
"Ah yes, leader. We will get all the information we can from him. We will lure him to our ship and capture him."
"Yes leader," they replied and they all turned towards the main hall.

Beyond the body of the monster, Jumun noticed something gleaming on the floor. He picked it up and saw that it was a ring; but not a normal ring. It had speckled emeralds embedded in it. Jumun put it on and turned away from the monster's dead body to be confronted with a slimy octopus like creature.

"Who are you?" it asked.
He looked the animal over. The marks it made were very similar to the waves of sand he saw outside. But that was unusual for the creature seemed to crave moisture like a frog, and would definitely not of survived the heat outside.
"Who are you?" the creature said again.
"Ah, I'm Jumun Vaster." Jumun stammered.
"Well, how did you bring us back to life?" it asked.
"Bring you back to life?" Juman questioned with a look of surprise.
"Yes, you brought us back to life after we were killed by the Gorax."
"Well I don't know you came alive again, but how did you get here in the first place?"

A few more of the creatures entered the room.
"That's a long story but I will tell it," said the creature.

"One day our ship, the Explorer, crash landed in this planet. At that time the planet was water, so the ship sank. Being amphibians we adapted perfectly in our water flooded ships. We even invented engines that worked under the water. We also found a human on this water planet. He had built this palace and is now in our ship. We liked the planet but its nothing like our home so we fired up the engines to leave. Unfortunately that woke the Gorax up. He killed us all and we know, but you don?t know, the law of Gorax's. When a Gorax is asleep the planet becomes a water planet. When he awakes the planet becomes a desert and when he dies the planet turns back to water and all the people the Gorax killed come back to life. The Gorax chained our ship to the ground so we can't take off and he now patrols our ship by walking upside-down underground. The reason we even came to this sector is because of an Emerald Speckled Ring, a legendary ring that has the power to turn any planet to a water planet. It's just what we want, being amphibians."

"How did you find this all out?" Jumun asked.
"Oh, there are many ancient manuscripts that tell us that our species once had the ring and of the great things we did with it," the creatures answered.
"Do you want to come and see the human? He might be someone you know."
"Ah. No thank you creatures but..."

The creatures didn't wait for an answer. The leader yelled something and they all turned on him. Jumun ran backwards and he suddenly felt an urge to lift his finger at one of the creatures. He did and a light burst forth out of his ring and knocked the creature down flat. Jumun did the same with the others. Now all but one, who had ran away, lay dazed. He ran out of the room to palace door. It broke and a cold wave of water swept him out of the building. The palace promptly collapsed under the waves. He looked around there was nothing but water. Another wave swept him underwater and he saw a ship in chains. Deep rumblings shook the world. Jumun was scared.

"Where was all the rumbling coming from?" he thought. He then thought about the human and dived deeper into the sea. He wanted see if he could find him.

Comments for The Emerald Speckled Ring: Part 1

Average Rating starstarstarstarstar

Click here to add your own comments

Jun 07, 2010
by: Ben

hey James

that's an AWESOME story. where did you get the idea from. I read the part 2 and there both cool!

Great job James!

Oct 26, 2009
Great story!
by: Candi

Wow, James - excellent story! It is interesting and well written. Can't wait to read more!

Click here to add your own comments

Join in and write your own page! It's easy to do. How? Simply click here to return to James' Magnificent Chronicles.

Recent Articles

  1. Homeschool Freebies - Enter to win Teaching from Rest! the Best Homeschool Deals

    Nov 27, 16 08:53 PM

    Homeschool Freebies and Giveaways - latest 2016 homeschool competitions to win amazing curriculum and resources

    Read More

  2. 50% off ALL DYH E-BOOKS

    Nov 25, 16 08:45 AM

    Now, until midnight November 30th, 2016, you will have a chance to buy and download any of my ebooks for half the price! You won't see this advertised on the Ebook pages, bu…

    Read More

  3. Learning Stages helps you focus on what is important in the Homeschool Context

    Nov 17, 16 10:24 PM

    Thinking about learning stages helps to focus our attention on the best teaching methods, what to focus on and real life learning in their stage.

    Read More

Contact | Home